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Underwater Ophelia · 08-26-2009, 07:34 AM

The first stanza isn't terrible, but there's nothing remarkable about it, and it reads like a child's playground rhyme.
The second stanza is 100% cliche and uninspired.

Remember, that's not necessarily a bad thing. Everyone starts somewhere.

08-26-2009, 07:34 AM	#7
Underwater Ophelia Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: Earth. Posts: 8,001	The first stanza isn't terrible, but there's nothing remarkable about it, and it reads like a child's playground rhyme. The second stanza is 100% cliche and uninspired. Remember, that's not necessarily a bad thing. Everyone starts somewhere. __________________ You lost the rep system for this.