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Sir Canvas Corpsey · 12-04-2010, 03:14 AM

This'd be better off as just a monologue of thought, it barely has rhythm, thematically it sorts of flows but the language doesn't... it's just so... clunky... and boring.

Lydia don't be so arrogant yourself, there's no reason anyone has to answer to you or your demands. What's immature about asking for a consensus to hold the circle jerk and admit to the 'cold hard reality' that a piece of work is bad?

If you want cold hard reality and fantastic writing, then read some Bukowski, hopefully, you'll notice the difference and learn something.

12-04-2010, 03:14 AM	#14
Sir Canvas Corpsey Join Date: Jul 2007 Location: Australia Posts: 2,424	This'd be better off as just a monologue of thought, it barely has rhythm, thematically it sorts of flows but the language doesn't... it's just so... clunky... and boring. Lydia don't be so arrogant yourself, there's no reason anyone has to answer to you or your demands. What's immature about asking for a consensus to hold the circle jerk and admit to the 'cold hard reality' that a piece of work is bad? If you want cold hard reality and fantastic writing, then read some Bukowski, hopefully, you'll notice the difference and learn something. __________________ “Lots of ways to help people. Sometimes heal patients; sometimes execute dangerous people. Either way helps.”