[Bella Sophia]

Originally Posted by HumanePain

You didn't say it.

I don't criticize with contempt very often, so you must understand that for me that was the "lowest" I have ever gone in terms of negative criticism.

OK, here is something more constructive:

Take the emotion, the hatred and the violence and express it symbolically.
What you have written here comes across as very simple.

Symbolism makes it more...entertaining.

Ah, that's what I meant.
Thanks for using better words. Haha.