Black handbag.

Unimatrix 00 · 04-10-2009, 01:42 PM

I stare down into the gaping mouth of my handbag
The eyes are standing on a cliff, a tipping point
Shapes emerge, engulfed in black matter
What do I want, what do I need?
None of this is relenting
It never stops
I need to get out
But how?

(Metaphor for general feelings)

Bat Attack · 04-17-2009, 03:54 AM

That is the best thing you have ever written.

Desdemona · 04-17-2009, 04:24 AM

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Originally Posted by Bat Attack

That is the best thing you have ever written.

Quoted for truth.

Unimatrix 00 · 04-17-2009, 07:30 AM

Ack thank you people .. Its not great though, I rushed the end I think :/

x

Learing Cordelia · 04-19-2009, 12:51 AM

I like it. I don't think you rushed the ending at all.

Unimatrix 00 · 04-19-2009, 02:11 PM

Thank you darling. x x

Opteron_Man · 04-19-2009, 02:45 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Unimatrix 00

I stare down into the gaping mouth of my handbag
The eyes are standing on a cliff, a tipping point
Shapes emerge, engulfed in black matter
What do I want, what do I need?
None of this is relenting
It never stops
I need to get out
But how?

(Metaphor for general feelings)

Not bad uni!

Learing Cordelia · 04-19-2009, 06:44 PM

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Originally Posted by Unimatrix 00

Thank you darling. x x

No problem, I like your poetry =)