Elenor

[lapalia_era]

Do you feel her cry?...


Never, ever, ever again
Nasty feelings pulsing throught my veins
Thoughts that let my bones get broken again and again

Cut them out...
and into pieces
Let them run...
and bleed it

Broken bones
and damadged minds
Cross the light
and let it die

Insanity lightens in her eye
The bullet´s sleeping deep in her spine
Laying the rigid body into the grave and praying for revenge

Cut them out...
said her soul
Let them run...
and now there´s gore

Broken bones,
to the grave
Cross the light
and never shame

Now there´s silence in the rain
The raven´s calling nevermore
and the shadow overflows
No angels, no deamons next door
not telling you goodbey...
sweet Elenor...

L.U.M.

[Wrath]

Sigh....I hate it when people rip off of Poe as I love him so...ohhh i rhymed =)
While you wrote this I never care to see so much of another persons work in something.....

[lapalia_era]

lol i never meant to copy Poe as i started to write ths but in the end...Elenor was the only name that rhymed with "next door" >.<
and since i already mentoied a raven, i thought it would be kind of amusing to give some piece of Edgar in my writing ^^

[Wrath]

A poem does not have to rhyme to be a poem. I love poetry when I can see it play out in my mind like a story or song. Its the emotion in the writing I want to feel.
I have said befor I hate poetry but I can love it when done with passion.
Try writing it with your feelings instead of making it rhyme

[lapalia_era]

i just needed to put this rhyme into this...once it got up on my mind it would haunt me till death if i didnt