En Espanol

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I've been taking Spanish for six years, and this is my first poem in the language... I'm excited, but please tell me what you think. If anyone spots grammar problems, I'm very sorry. Lo Siento.

Miguel

Mi amor, Mi corazón,
Todo mi mundo y la dulce de mi vida…
Mi amor, Mi corazón,
Todo mi mundo y la dulce de mi vida…

Espéreme, espéreme,
Espéreme cuando el cielo es oscuro.
Espéreme, espéreme,
Espéreme cuando eres ausente.

Te Amé cuando estabas aquí,
Voy a continuar hasta el día final,
Nada me romperá, nada me parará
Esto yo prometo con todo mi amor.

Espéreme, espéreme,
Espéreme cuando el cielo es oscuro.
Espéreme, espéreme,
Espéreme cuando eres ausente.

Mi amor, Mi corazón,
Anque estas muerto, estas conmigo,
Mi amor, Mi corazón,
Nada puede morir si hay amor en el mundo.

Espéreme, espéreme,
Espéreme cuando el cielo es oscuro.
Espéreme, espéreme,
Espéreme cuando eres ausente.


-Cielo

[Godslayer Jillian]

Haha, well, it sounds more like a song than a poem.
Just one thing: Say 'esperame' instead of 'espereme'
Esperame is 'wait for me' while Espereme is more like 'wait for me, sir'.

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::makes quick adjustments... THANK YOU!!!::

[mrs.wes straker]

A little more help:
"Eres" is like a permanent form of "you are" so you would say, 'Tu eres una mujer' (You are a woman) but to say 'You are here' use Estas. So change eres ausente to estas ausente. "El cielo es oscuro" ideally would be changed to esta oscuro; same idea.

Dulce is descriptive---sweet. Dulzura is sweetness, which would also be more appropriate. Hope this helps and that I didn't sound like a teacher.

[erotomaniac87]

Originally Posted by ugh...

I've been taking Spanish for six years, and this is my first poem in the language... I'm excited, but please tell me what you think. If anyone spots grammar problems, I'm very sorry. Lo Siento.

Miguel

Mi amor, Mi corazón,
Eres Todo (you could omit it) mi mundo y la dulce (dulzura) de mi vida…
Mi amor, Mi corazón,
Eres Todo (again, you could omit it) mi mundo y la dulce (dulzura) de mi vida…

Espérame, espérame,
Espérame cuando el cielo es (esté) oscuro.
Espérame, espérame,
Espérame cuando (aunque) eres (aunque) (siguas) ausente.

Te Amé cuando estabas aquí,
Voy a continuar hasta el día final,
Nada me romperá, nada me parará
Esto yo (te - add to sentence) prometo con [todo mi] (omit it) amor.

Espérame, espérame,
Espérame cuando el cielo es (esté) oscuro.
Espérame, espérame,
Espérame cuando (aunque) eres (siguas) ausente.

Mi amor, Mi corazón,
Aunque estés muerto, estás conmigo,
Mi amor, Mi corazón,
Nada puede morir si hay amor en el mundo.

Espérame, espérame,
Espérame cuando el cielo es (esté) oscuro.
Espérame, espérame,
Espérame cuando (aunque) eres (siguas) ausente.


-Cielo

I hope you don't mind that I took the time to make some slight changes and corrections that'll aid in the flowing rhythm of your poem. Either way, it was an interesting read, great effort on your part! I especially liked the part that says: "Nada puede morir si hay amor en el mundo." Thanks for sharing.

[Vako]

Friendly reminder;

It's Español, not Espanol.

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Originally Posted by Vako

Friendly reminder;

It's Español, not Espanol.

I just couldn't figure out how to do the tilde on my keyboard (I used symbols for the poem).

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Thank you guys for all the help!

[Invisigoth69]

My love, My heart, All my world and the candy of my life… My love, My heart, All my world and the candy of my
life…

Expect me, expect me, Expect me when the sky is dark. Expect me, expect me, Expect me when you are absent.

I Loved you when you were here, I Am going to continue to the final day, Nothing will break me, nothing This
will stop me I promise with all my love.

Expect me, expect me, Expect me when the sky is dark. Expect me, expect me, Expect me when you are absent.

My love, My heart, (SOMETHING) these dead persons, these with me, My love, My heart, Nothing can die if there is love
in the world.

Expect me, expect me, Expect me when the sky is dark. Expect me, expect me, Expect me when you are absent.

-Sky

Well, your Spanish is more than likely better than my "ghetto" Spanish.
Yes, I am of hispanic decent but that does not mean my Spanish is any good. he he. This was all I could make out of your poem and I think I might have wrecked it. Sorry.

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I origanally wrote the poem in Spanish, but how I would translate it is like this...

Michael

My love, my darling,
All my world, and the sweetness of my life...
My love, my darling,
All my world and the sweetness of my life...

Wait for me, wait for me
Wait foe me when the sky is dark,
Wait for me, wait for me,
Wait for me when you away.

I loved you when you were here,
I will continue until the final day,
Nothing will break me, nothing will stop me,
This I promise with all my love.

Wait for me, Wait for me
Wait foe me when the sky is dark,
Wait for me, Wait for me,
Wait for me when you away.

My love, my darling,
Though you are dead, you are with me,
My love, my darling,
Nothing can die if there is love in the world.

Wait for me, Wait for me
Wait foe me when the sky is dark,
Wait for me, Wait for me,
Wait for me when you away.

-Cielo

[Shyantra]

To get the ñ, you need to have langauge bar set onto spanish. I have a paper on it somewheres....

But onto your poem, great; I liked it.

[erotomaniac87]

Originally Posted by Shyantra

To get the ñ, you need to have langauge bar set onto spanish. I have a paper on it somewheres....

But onto your poem, great; I liked it.

Or just type in the following code: Alt + 0241.

[Shyantra]

I was trying to say that you could get the whole keyboard in spanish, but nonetheless you are right. I personally stay away from the ALT keys. Too many numbers to remember.

[erotomaniac87]

Originally Posted by Shyantra

I was trying to say that you could get the whole keyboard in spanish, but nonetheless you are right. I personally stay away from the ALT keys. Too many numbers to remember.

Well, you don't necessarily have to remember all the codes. You could always just bookmark the source (online site) for later referral.

[Lady_Lacrimosa_Umbrae]

Wow, I'm surprised of how many people speak Spanish here!
By the way, I liked your poem, it's beautiful.

[Nessa]

Well... Spanish is VERY EASY compared to Catalan... Spanish has no secrets, except for letter "h" and the "no-difference" between "v" and "b".

Yes... I'm a Spaniard...

BUUUUUUUUUUUUUT, DON'T TRY EVER TO SPEAK CATALAN (i know you won't), because it has more exceptions than rules.

Sorry for my English.

I hope i didn't discouraged you to learn Catalan... Hehehe...

[Nessa]

Now, a little poem in Spanish (level: easy)

No quedan lágrimas...
... para llorar,
No quedan palabras...
... para decir,
No quedan sueños...
... para soñar,
Ya sólo me queda mi vida...
... mi vida sin ti.

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I like that little poem in spanish.

Alot.

[thedoll]

i love your use of repitition

[Circle V]

It sounds good. I'd recommend that you pay more attention to stressed syllables and line length, however. I try to write down the number of syllables I use per line, and occasionally I'll add tildes on stressed syllables (where they don't already occur) to keep track.