I lay thee down

[ShadowxMakerZ]

I Lay Thee Down

I lay thee underneath the sorrow
Pain, agony once held within
Now forgotten amidst the endless fog

I taunt thee
No where to be found...
Wallowing in confusion
For ones' eternity

I follow thee
At each corner...
Following the despair that awaits'
Throughout thy shallow time

I shall kill thee
When thy time has rung
For the cycle has yet begun


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Crap mood so I made this. Enjoy +/- what ever.

[Sir Canvas Corpsey]

This is pretty terrible, it's just a bunch of words thrown together and the words themselves are pretty damn boring.

[Still Jack]

Well, I can't really put it kindly, but it seems as if a pig shat in your head.
Thank you Withnail. =]

[SweetJane]

Shadow, are you a L.A.R.P.er?

[ShadowxMakerZ]

Hahaha like I said I got bored so I thought I'd give it a shot. I'm no actual poet .

For the L.A.R.P.er theory... I constantly change the role I play which for me is inevitable.

[Sir Canvas Corpsey]

You're avoiding the question through a pseudo-philosophical statement. =/

[SweetJane]

Yep. totally a L.A.R.P.er.

[Mir]

Originally Posted by Still Jack

Well, I can't really put it kindly, but it seems as if a pig shat in your head.
Thank you Withnail. =]

hahahaha - post of the day

[ShadowxMakerZ]

Originally Posted by SweetJane

Yep. totally a L.A.R.P.er.

Muahahaha......

Also that was a pretty damn funny post StillJack.

[vae victus]

Still Jack, you made this thread worthwhile lol

[Starke von Oben]

Originally Posted by ShadowxMakerZ

I Lay Thee Down

I lay thee underneath the sorrow
Pain, agony once held within
Now forgotten amidst the endless fog

I taunt thee
No where to be found...
Wallowing in confusion
For ones' eternity

I follow thee
At each corner...
Following the despair that awaits'
Throughout thy shallow time

I shall kill thee
When thy time has rung
For the cycle has yet begun


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Crap mood so I made this. Enjoy +/- what ever.

Stick to fighting with plastic swords.

Poetry is not something you just "have a go at", despite what some new-age twaddle may have you believe.

[the-nihilist]

Actually considering it's nothing more than a form of art involving a roundabout way of conveying some sort of message through use of unnecessarily convoluted wordplay I would assume it is something you can "have a go at." It's not like it matters after all... whether or not it's considered good by people who have or claim to have credibility in the field.

Then again, I know absolutely nothing of poetry; I'm just make assumptions based on empirical observation.

[Starke von Oben]

Originally Posted by the-nihilist

Actually considering it's nothing more than a form of art involving a roundabout way of conveying some sort of message through use of unnecessarily convoluted wordplay I would assume it is something you can "have a go at." It's not like it matters after all... whether or not it's considered good by people who have or claim to have credibility in the field.

Then again, I know absolutely nothing of poetry; I'm just make assumptions based on empirical observation.

Go back to school.

[gothicusmaximus]

Actually considering it's nothing more than a form of art involving a roundabout way of conveying some sort of message through use of unnecessarily convoluted wordplay I would assume it is something you can "have a go at." It's not like it matters after all... whether or not it's considered good by people who have or claim to have credibility in the field.

Then again, I know absolutely nothing of poetry; I'm just make assumptions based on empirical observation.

I see Starke Von Oben's 'Go Back To School' and raise him a 'Go Fuck Yourself."

[Despanan]

Yeah, you can totally "have a go" at poetry. It's not like it's a sacred fucking art form or anything.

Hell even if it was, then this forum would be dark hole of artistic blasphemy anyhow.

[ShadowxMakerZ]

Originally Posted by the-nihilist

Actually considering it's nothing more than a form of art involving a roundabout way of conveying some sort of message through use of unnecessarily convoluted wordplay I would assume it is something you can "have a go at." It's not like it matters after all... whether or not it's considered good by people who have or claim to have credibility in the field.

You got a good point there ++++ thanks

Originally Posted by Despanan

Yeah, you can totally "have a go" at poetry. It's not like it's a sacred fucking art form or anything.

Muahahaha that would be true, it's not no fking sacred art you got me laughing there though some people make it seem that way.

[chiclolad]

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[LovelyxBlackLace]

I lay thee underneath the sorrow
Pain, agony once held within
Now forgotten amidst the endless fog

I like it. Very original and full of poignant pain. Looking forward to hear more about the cycle.