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Literature Please come visit. People get upset, write poetry about it, and post it here. Sometimes we also talk about books.

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Old 04-01-2011, 11:43 AM   #1
Nightwalker39
 
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Set Free

Have I found this a door before me?
Yet I can't tell where I'm at or where
it's from, but here I am and yes it is as
well.
So where is here I yell, and strange as
it seems this voice it answers me, but
faintly.
I can't hear what is said, or all
of what it means. Yet now, I'm closer
for it beckons me,with a hissing of my
name.
I open it and I look through. Oh..!
It's a room of fire with a long way down,
with people screaming all around! Then
I look again and no one is there?

Now all of this is poisoning me! This
case of no return with burn,and Oh! it's
getting just so hard to breath.....
My heart is quickened with fears of
falling through, and I can't quit moving
forward too! And still it beckons me.
NO! I scream in reply for I wish to
live and not to die, but if I fall I'll surely
die forever.
No never this, it just can't be. That
these, these damned are wanting me!
And so,so specially and only me?

Flames shoot up with burning hands.
They reach for me, and yell again. Oh!
And I quiver.
So what is it that I have done?! That the
God of life has left to shun, this man with
fear of falling in a vast forever?
This loss embedded in my open soul,
now nothing but a gaping hole. And,
these broken times which took there toll,
with frozen embers.
So here it is this room of fire left causing
me to loose desire,for simply one more
dire day.

Now one last time it calls to me, and tells me
it can set me free from all this hell it's
causing me, and I'm wanting to believe.
So now I know the cries I heard,
it was not their voice which spoke a word
Just a lonely one in me,
Set Free.......
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Old 04-03-2011, 10:53 AM   #2
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I like the theme but I noticed a typo in the second last paragraph... Are you open to some of my thoughts?
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